Nedra Oltz: not really... unless the entire essay is all about breaking up homes. if it has something to about breaking up homes AND losing money, then you have to include that you're also talking about losing money. and don't put to-be verbs in your sentence >_>
Mark Hovanes: its good but add a little more touchlikepeople gamble all the time, but gambling has alwaysd been linked to breaking up homes, losing money, etc.if you dont like itgo with yours...Show more
No comments:
Post a Comment